So eh, I basically came up with some metal lyrics, and I know there are some metalheads here so I want your opinion on it.

The song is called "The Demon Boar Shall Feast Upon Ye" and I wrote it all alone.




The Demon Boar shall feast upon ye - Antiochos

I AM THE DEMON BOAR,
DEATH'S HUMAN FORM
I AM THE DEMON BOAR,
DEATH'S HUMAN FORM

GUITAR RIFFS

I HAVE COME TO DEVOUR YOUR TESTICLES,
MARRIED WOMEN CURSE ME,
FOR THEIR MEN ARE NOW BALL-LESS,
I AM THE WIDOWMAKER THE DEMON BOAR

I AM THE DEMON BOAR,
DEATH'S HUMAN FORM
I AM THE DEMON BOAR,
DEATH'S HUMAN FORM

I WALK IN THE ENCHANTED FOREST,
EVERYBODY FLEES
(the scent of fear)
I HAVE COME FOR THE FAIRY KING'S BALLS,
FOR THEN I WILL RULE THE SEVEN SEAS

GUITAR RIFFS

BLOOD, CARNAGE
DEATH TO ALL
(the scent of blood)
THE FAIRY KING NOW LIES DEAD BY MY FEET,
HIS MALE GENITALIA STILL WARM IN MY MOUTH


I AM THE DEMON BOAR,
DEATH'S HUMAN FORM
I AM THE DEMON BOAR,
DEATH'S HUMAN FORM

GUITAR RIFFS

I AAAAAAM THEEEEE DEEEEEMOOOOOOON BOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAARRRRRR




So what do you think about it? I want honest opinions but no flaming.

I love it.

that was totally Phoronidaed up

You sir, are and idiot.

How'd you know I had a demon boar fetish?

You don't hide it as well as you think .

You can tell that your lyrics are very deep, and that you really express your emotions with them. If you can express yourself that well with just a few lines, I suggest that you consider a writing career. You would obviously be very successful.

Owh lawd.

Complex, but straight through the point. This would make mommy proud .

We need to get your message to the people.

Devour my testicles pls

Pure gold.

I giggled.

Y'all niggas be posting in a troll thread.

What the Phoronida? I've been living by that song for the past 3 days and now you're telling me that it was a troll post?

Just quietly..
are you god?